(Original Photography by +Lotus Carroll)
You
say I am oblivious as it is,
The
light sheds no colors upon.
They
know what they see,
If
you ever enter the land
Stay
and follow the birds.
They
perch upon every tree;
It
is life it follows, passionately.
Imagine
there is a better feel,
Where
branches grow the green,
And
in a moment of sadness
It
drops and bares all brown.
Whenever
you camouflage
Swiftly
run into the blue.
Don’t
hesitate to look back,
During
the dawn, no color
Bares
any light to me.
-Erick Flores
Hi Erick, I absolutely loved this poem, brevity is important sometimes and your poetry can take on a whole new shape and meaning. Just a thought. This poem was well written and sometimes when you let the piece rest over night and come back to it, it emerges a whole new creature. You are doing very well. Maturity comes in time. As you continue to write, rest, and write some more, your poetry will stun you. Please keep writing. You are very, very, good.
ReplyDeleteHello Mr. Evans. Thank you for the commentary! It is true that brevity is important. I like how you said "as you continue to write, rest, and write some more, your poetry will stun you," it is comments like these that keep me motivated. Thank you!
ReplyDelete-Erick Flores
What are friends for Erick but to help each other out? I will continue to visit you blog. You may subscribe to mine if you like upon making a comment. There is a blue link in bottom right hand corner of page.
ReplyDeleteTalk later, and, stay creative!
@John Evans, I am glad to hear that. Yes, we will help each other out. Thank you for your visits. Like friends, I will visit your blog out as well. By the way I subscribed already. Thank you!
ReplyDelete-Erick Flores