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The clock is ticking in the lonely living room,
The
owner suddenly sweeping in like a broom,
Begins
his normal business for the day,
Has
to make way for the date by the bay.
He
was swift in action; time was a barrier,
He
wondered if he would eventually be a carrier.
He
missed the seconds, the wind blew,
She
waited a second longer, becoming dew.
How
the tears ran without being kind.
If
only she knew that she ran in his mind,
And
if only he knew she was running,
Running
in the damp sand, stunning.
They
were both runners in each other’s minds,
Each
having a special part in the race that binds,
The
long lasting ribbon that gathered,
All
simple thought that they had mastered,
Now
she remains like the clock,
Alone,
afraid to be lifeless like the rock.
-Erick Flores
profound imagery on this.
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting me.
Feel free to link to up to 3 pieces to poetry picnic as well.
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Hello @Morning,
ReplyDeleteIt means so much when I get to see comments from people, but you have been one of the few that has struck me. Thank you for your analytical comments! Greatly appreciate it!
Erick Flores
i really enjoyed reading this :)
ReplyDeletegreat job
Hey Patti!
ReplyDeleteThank you for commenting. I am glad you enjoyed reading my poem!
Erick Flores
i like how i can just visualize it
ReplyDeleteits sweet and awesome
Hey Kenny,
ReplyDeleteThanks for commenting! Glad to hear from you!
Erick Flores
The images here are great - and particularly that carried by the final two lines.
ReplyDeleteU weave magic...to create such a deep poem on a simple theme and that too with ryhming sequence is awesome...I appreciate the time u must be putting in 2 write these.thanks for sharing.
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Hello Mr. King,
ReplyDeleteglad to hear from you. Thank you for visiting and sharing your comments!
Erick Flores
Hello Rohit,
ReplyDeleteThank you for visiting. Always a pleasure to see analytical comments like yours. Hope to have you back here soon.
Erick Flores
hi Erick, thanks for visiting with me today :-)
ReplyDeletei like the line "They were both runners in each other’s minds," so much :-) it says it all, happy days!
Wow great verse and of course loved the rhyme to it too.
ReplyDeleteHello @Birdie,
ReplyDeleteThank you for taking the time to visit my blog and commenting! :D
I wish the same to you!
Erick Flores
Hello Pat!
ReplyDeleteGood to see you on my poetry blog. Thank you for taking the time to comment!
Erick Flores
Beautiful poem. Loved the rhythm and rhyme. I've often wondered about such connections between people too. Is the timing just off?
ReplyDeleteHello Rachel,
ReplyDeleteThank you for visiting my poetry blog. Yes, connections are strong, and I believe that these connections may exist in different perspectives. What do you mean if the timing is off? In the poem?
-Erick Flores
the middle section of the poem is stunning:-)
ReplyDeleteWell Done, I have been that rock~
ReplyDeleteGreat flow in this one~
Running on empty as Jackson Browne says, good one EF!
ReplyDelete@Sayan,thank you for commenting, glad to hear you liked the middle! Hope all is well!
ReplyDelete-Erick F.
Hello Ella,
ReplyDeletesorry to hear. I am sure you grew from that experience. We should never let anyone take the best of ourselves. Greetings! Hope all is well. Thank you for commenting!
-Erick F.
Hello @rch,
ReplyDeleteindeed! Glad to hear from you!
-Erick F.
P.S. - I always enjoy your poetry!
Brilliantly funny, over-the-top imagery! Thank you.
ReplyDeleteHello Mrs. Nissen-Wade,
ReplyDeletethank you for reading my poem and commenting!
I am glad to hear you enjoyed it!
-Erick F.