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Monday, December 12, 2011

Stranded (Original)

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I speak these words with much disdain,
I have not progressed in the days of life.
I have remained still, without intentions.
I see the shore and attempt to reach,
To catch a glimpse of what I’ve become.
I want to return back on the boat;
You see it took me years to finally build.
The days passed me by faster than usual,
Always leaving my dreams float by,
See where it has left me quickly stranded,
The sand represents the time I let pass,
Just like the sand in the shiny hourglass,
I am another particle of sand in the vast.

Erick Flores
*Please note: the poem written does not necessarily portray the life of the poet.
Adapted from the prompt in the "Magpie Tales" blog

14 comments:

  1. hi Erick, really lovely, i just love the last 3 sentences! happy days :-)
    ps: and thanks for sharing that you have the same issues with blogger ... good to know that i'm not that incapable ... haha!

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  2. Erick this is stunning.....perfect for the prompt!

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  3. Indeed, when you think of us, we are each a grain of sand....not as important in the universe as sometimes we would like to believe. I enjoyed your perspective.

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  4. i enjoyed it, especially ending with vast as a noun.

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  5. Delightfully imaginative take on the prompt...

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  6. Hello @Birdie,
    thank you for submitting a comment! I am glad you enjoyed the last 4 lines. Thank you, happy days to you too.
    ps: Yes, it is definitely inconvenient. I just got used to it. Thank you for visiting.

    Erick Flores

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  7. Hello Carrie,
    thank you for your assuring comment! Hope you are doing well!

    Erick Flores

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  8. Hello Mary,
    I am glad to see you caught the essence of this poem. When I saw the picture, it spoke to me about that. Thank you for commenting. Always good to hear from you!

    Erick Flores

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  9. Hello Ed,
    I am glad you enjoyed the poem. I am also glad that you noticed that! Thank you for reading and commenting!

    Erick Flores

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  10. Hello @Berowne,
    Thank you for reading my poem. I am glad to have you here. I hope to see your comments continually. Blessings. Hope all is well.

    Erick Flores

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  11. Hi Erick, Very well written. We are nothing but a piece of universe's time.

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  12. Hello Neha! How are you doing? Thank you for your wonderful comment! Agreed!

    Erick Flores

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  13. Hi Erik - I think this is the first thing of yours I have read. Time passing with our without our consent is a disturbing, universal thing. The lines of yours that really struck me are, 'I have remained still, without intentions.
    I see the shore and attempt to reach,
    To catch a glimpse of what I’ve become.'
    A thought-provoking write to say the least.

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  14. Hello Mary,
    thank you for visiting my blog post. It means a lot to have you here. Thank you for your comment! Glad to hear from you.
    Erick Flores

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