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Monday, December 5, 2011

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Original Photography by: +Lotus Carroll
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The clock is ticking in the lonely living room,
The owner suddenly sweeping in like a broom,
Begins his normal business for the day,
Has to make way for the date by the bay.
He was swift in action; time was a barrier,
He wondered if he would eventually be a carrier.
He missed the seconds, the wind blew,
She waited a second longer, becoming dew.
How the tears ran without being kind.
If only she knew that she ran in his mind,
And if only he knew she was running,
Running in the damp sand, stunning.
They were both runners in each other’s minds,
Each having a special part in the race that binds,
The long lasting ribbon that gathered,
All simple thought that they had mastered,
Now she remains like the clock,
Alone, afraid to be lifeless like the rock.

-Erick Flores

24 comments:

  1. profound imagery on this.

    Thanks for visiting me.

    Feel free to link to up to 3 pieces to poetry picnic as well.

    Smiles.

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  2. Hello @Morning,

    It means so much when I get to see comments from people, but you have been one of the few that has struck me. Thank you for your analytical comments! Greatly appreciate it!

    Erick Flores

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  3. i really enjoyed reading this :)
    great job

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  4. Hey Patti!
    Thank you for commenting. I am glad you enjoyed reading my poem!

    Erick Flores

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  5. i like how i can just visualize it
    its sweet and awesome

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  6. Hey Kenny,
    Thanks for commenting! Glad to hear from you!

    Erick Flores

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  7. The images here are great - and particularly that carried by the final two lines.

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  8. U weave magic...to create such a deep poem on a simple theme and that too with ryhming sequence is awesome...I appreciate the time u must be putting in 2 write these.thanks for sharing.
    Rohit
    floating-expressions

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  9. Hello Mr. King,
    glad to hear from you. Thank you for visiting and sharing your comments!

    Erick Flores

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  10. Hello Rohit,
    Thank you for visiting. Always a pleasure to see analytical comments like yours. Hope to have you back here soon.

    Erick Flores

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  11. hi Erick, thanks for visiting with me today :-)
    i like the line "They were both runners in each other’s minds," so much :-) it says it all, happy days!

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  12. Wow great verse and of course loved the rhyme to it too.

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  13. Hello @Birdie,
    Thank you for taking the time to visit my blog and commenting! :D
    I wish the same to you!

    Erick Flores

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  14. Hello Pat!

    Good to see you on my poetry blog. Thank you for taking the time to comment!

    Erick Flores

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  15. Beautiful poem. Loved the rhythm and rhyme. I've often wondered about such connections between people too. Is the timing just off?

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  16. Hello Rachel,
    Thank you for visiting my poetry blog. Yes, connections are strong, and I believe that these connections may exist in different perspectives. What do you mean if the timing is off? In the poem?

    -Erick Flores

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  17. the middle section of the poem is stunning:-)

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  18. Well Done, I have been that rock~
    Great flow in this one~

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  19. Running on empty as Jackson Browne says, good one EF!

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  20. @Sayan,thank you for commenting, glad to hear you liked the middle! Hope all is well!
    -Erick F.

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  21. Hello Ella,
    sorry to hear. I am sure you grew from that experience. We should never let anyone take the best of ourselves. Greetings! Hope all is well. Thank you for commenting!
    -Erick F.

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  22. Hello @rch,
    indeed! Glad to hear from you!
    -Erick F.

    P.S. - I always enjoy your poetry!

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  23. Brilliantly funny, over-the-top imagery! Thank you.

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  24. Hello Mrs. Nissen-Wade,
    thank you for reading my poem and commenting!
    I am glad to hear you enjoyed it!

    -Erick F.

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